17A – Elevator Pitch No. 2
1)
The pitch.
2) A
reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
The feedback that stood out to me as important was that fact
that everyone that commented enjoyed the scenario that I gave in the beginning
to help the listener visualize the experience and to convey the importance of
the problem. Overall, the introduction was the main point of all the responses
I received, and the comments I had about seemed hopeful about the idea of a new
library, which boosted my confidence. These reactions were useful since they
helped me determine what I should keep in my next elevator pitch and what to capitalize
on. My roommate also gave me more feedback outside of blogger and told me that
I should be standing and dress more professionally.
2)
What did you change, based on the feedback?
Based
on the feedback I received, I included the same introduction since it seemed to
resonate well with the people who commented. Likewise, I dressed in a blazer and
stood up to convey a more executive presence.
Hi Nikki, the picture drawn in the beginning is a great, it really makes me relate to the experience you're talking about. You spoke at a good pace and very clearly. This idea about giving students a new space to study doesn't seem to have any flaws. Nice job on standing and looking more professionally it definitely adds to your elevator pitch. Overall, good job.
ReplyDeleteHey Nikki,
ReplyDeleteI think your pitch was very well put together and it was able to capture the listeners' attention right off the bat by painting a picture inside of their heads. Your problem is definitely a big issue, especially since the campus population is continuing to grow. I know that the university recently built a couple new dorms a few years ago, but it would definitely be a good time to build an additional library.